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11 January 2007 @ 06:41 pm
Punishment (1/2)  
Title: Punishment (1/2)
Author: kujo_hikaru
Rating: this, R for language, later NC-17, for warnings below
Pairing: NaruSasu, uke!Sasuke Gang Bang
Warning: NonCon, Bondage, Rape, Gang Bang
Disclaimer: Naruto does not belong to me. I am not Masashi Kishimoto, the creator of these characters.
Summary: Sasuke is captured, and Hokage!Naruto lets Ibiki give him a "special" punishment.
Age: All the characters in this story are over 18 years old, so if Warriors for Innocence has a problem with my story, they can eat my hairy, white ass.

I don't even know where this came from. The lemon just appeared in my head, and I couldn't get it out. It kind of scares me that something like this came through my mind, but ... it's kinda hawt. I wrote the plot parts around the main lemon. This is totally written, and the other two parts will follow soon. As for the content, please don't kill me. Please? Follow the fake cut.



Sasuke was unceremoniously dumped on the floor of his cell. The two jounin guards checked over his chakra binders one last time, then closed the cell door. In his current state all Sasuke could do is listen to the sound of their retreating footsteps and the shallow pants of his own breathing.

‘Was this the fifteenth or sixteenth day they’ve interrogated me?’ Sasuke asked himself. ‘Without the light of day, I don’t even know how long I’ve been down here. Maybe I should have scratched off the number of sessions on the wall. Too late now…” Sasuke sighed internally. He knew they were watching him in the cell, and there was no way he’d let his captors see the effect they had on him.

‘Definitely sixteenth,’ Sasuke told himself firmly. He only wished they had left his hands unbound in the cell. His shoulders were starting to get used to spending hours at a time in the same awkward position, but it still hurt like hell when they moved him to the interrogation room. Plus, the place where his cursed mark used to be itched like hell. The absence of that little item certainly intrigued Sasuke to no end.

‘Must be that bitch Hokage, she did spend her childhood with Orochimaru. Maybe she figured out how to remove the mark. Doesn’t matter anyway, because that sick fuck will just relish in putting it back when he breaks his precious vessel out of Konoha’s prison,’ Sasuke continued in his inner monologue. The last comment managed to bring out a small smirk, but it was quickly erased lest his captors see. He needed to continue the façade until he was rescued by his master or by his little bitch, Kabuto.

And that’s all he needs to stay sane: he just needs to remember the image of a moaning Kabuto, slick with sweat and flushed with arousal writing under his touch. Just the memory of the little cock slut begging for Sasuke to fuck him was making him hard. ‘Fuck,’ was all Sasuke could say in his mind. Seeing as his hands were bound behind his back, there was nothing he could do with his “little problem” for the moment. To top it off, his captors probably saw the tent forming in his pants now, as well.

‘It’s not like it matters, though,’ Sasuke thought with a visible smirk. He looked up to the supposedly hidden camera and his smirk grew wider. ‘My master will be here soon, anyway.

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Ibiki reached the top of the stairs and rounded the corner of the hallway. As soon as he came into view, the two ANBU guards in front of the Hokage’s office seemed to stand even more at attention. He gave a quick internal grin at the effect he had on the men. Even the strongest ninja in Konoha cringed at the mention of his name, and for some strange reason that always gave Ibiki a rush.

Still, there is one man that scares Ibiki, and he’s about to enter said man’s office. That man happens to be the most powerful shinobi in the Hidden Leaf Village, and perhaps from any shinobi village in the world. The man who single-handedly destroyed the most feared missing nin ever spawned from any hidden shinobi village. The man who is the son of the most revered Hokage and the living legacy said Hokage left to the world. The only man alive that actually scares Ibiki Morino is the Rokudaime Hokage, Naruto Uzumaki.

Pulling that fear into a box and storing that box in a corner of his mind, Ibiki reached his hand out to the door in front of him and firmly knocked three times. After he heard the word “enter” emanate from the office, Ibiki opened the large door and stepped into the Hokage’s study. The sun-kissed leader of Konoha’s shinobi was hunched over some scrolls on his massive desk, his face squinted in concentration and the tip of his tongue sticking out of the corner of his mouth slightly. His pink-haired advisor was standing at the corner of his desk, a worried look on her face. Whatever he was reading, the Hokage did not look happy.

“Hokage-sama, I have the latest report from the Uchiha’s interrogation,” Ibiki said to the man behind the desk as he approached. When the deep blue eyes of the Hokage lifted to his face, Ibiki had to resist the urge to step back from the man’s commanding gaze. Irritation, anger, and frustration rolled across the Hokage’s eyes before he schooled his emotions to a dispassionate mask. Sakura looked even more worried when she regarded the scarred interrogation master.

“What new news does the traitor bring to us this time,” Naruto deadpanned. Sakura winced at the Hokage’s harsh words.

“He has revealed the location of another hidden Oto base on the border with Wind. He claims this is the last base he knows of, and I believe he is telling the truth. While under the genjutsu, he is too thoroughly broken to provide any more subterfuge,” Ibiki stated simply. He always treated interrogations dispassionately. After he mentioned the base, he pulled a scroll with the location from his vest and laid it on the Hokage’s desk.

“Good. After you end the jutsu, does he suspect anything? Is he still oblivious to his betrayal of Oto?” the Hokage asked. He picked up the scroll to study the information it contained while Ibiki continued his report.

“No, he is still in the dark. We’ve left him with the impression that he was captured only a few days ago and that we’ve just begun to interrogate him. He doesn’t remember any of the last month, nor the Oto invasion and your battle with Orochimaru.”

“Does he know of his master’s demise?” the Hokage asked, a bit of strain in his voice.

“No. In fact, when he’s under the genjutsu he talks about his time in the cell. Apparently, he’s using the hope of an Oto rescue party taking him home. He also speaks of … uh, carnal relations, with Kabuto Yakushi. Apparently, after Orochimaru was finished using the Uchiha he would give Kabuto to him in return. Outside of the genjutsu, his psyche thinks those memories will help stave off interrogation. As of yet, we have not rid him of that notion,” Ibiki said. He started blankly at the wall after he noticed the Hokage’s grip on his armrests tighten. The wood looked as if it would buckle if the onslaught continued. Sakura’s face drained of color and she looked as if she would gag.

“Is that so,” the Hokage spit out between clenched teeth.

“Yes. Hokage-sama, have you given any more thought to the punishment for the traitor? I believe we’ve reached the end of the usefulness in interrogating him. The flow of useful information seems to have dried up. Perhaps it’s time to enlighten him to his real situation and have him pay for his crimes?”

“Yes, fine, if you say he’s no longer useful then he will be executed,” the Hokage said sadly, leaning back in his chair and placing his hand over his eyes.

“NOOOOO,” Sakura screamed at Naruto. She rushed to his side and grabbed his arm tightly. “Naruto, you can’t DO that. Sasuke was our friend, he was family. He was your brother! You CAN’T kill him like that!” she shrieked at the Hokage.

“I have no choice, Sakura. He betrayed us, he betrayed our village. It’s my responsibility to protect this village now, and his transgression calls for execution. It wouldn’t be fair for me to make an exception, Sasuke or not,” the blonde intoned grimly. He removed Sakura’s hands from his sleeve and stood to look out the window.

“There may be a better punishment for the Uchiha, Hokage-sama,” Ibiki ventured to the man’s back. The Hokage turned to him and raised a brow at the comment. “I designed it, originally, for Orochimaru. I thought it would be a fitting torture jutsu if he were captured alive. Seeing as the Uchiha is as proud and unbending as the snake was, it should also work to break his spirit. Perhaps, after he knows the truth and we’ve broken him with the jutsu we may be able to reform him. At the very least, we can still use him as bait for the other Uchiha.” Naruto’s expression turned more and more sour and approached his desk again as Ibiki spoke. He slammed his hands down on the desktop by the time the Jounin was done.

“Jutsu? What torture jutsu could wash away the sins of that traitor?” the Hokage snapped at Ibiki. Sakura was still sitting next to the Hokage’s chair, sobbing into her hands.

“One that would so debase and humiliate him that it would take away his pride and his very will. After that, you can use him however you think would benefit the village. He would be like putty in your hand.”

“And what, pray tell, would be so horrible for Sasuke that he would break completely and be able to rejoin our village?” the blonde asked with a heavy note of skepticism. Sakura stopped sobbing and looked up at Ibiki expectantly.

“The genjutsu would simulate a situation for the target. He would believe he was raped by 12 different Leaf shinobi over the course of 3 days,” Ibiki stated dryly. Sakura’s sobs immediately picked up again, louder then before. The Hokage merely dropped back into his chair, staring at a place on the wall to the left of Ibiki’s head. He seemed to be arguing with himself inside of his mind. After a moment, he nodded to himself and looked back at Ibiki.

“Do it, but I have one change. I will be the twelfth shinobi, and I will go to him in reality after the first eleven are done,” Naruto stated coldly.

“Hai, Hokage-sama,” Ibiki said. He wasn’t sure if his voice wavered or not while he spoke, but he certainly felt his stomach lurch. There was only one man that scared Ibiki, and this was an example of why.



P.S., this is not Beta-ed. I need a Beta. Wanna be my Beta?


J
 
 
 
alexis | lexibob: Satisfactionlexibob on January 12th, 2007 05:21 am (UTC)
I think I rather like the idea of this gang rape thing that's going on, kukukuku...! (Or perhaps that's the sadistic side that's talking, heh.)

Yeyyy, NaruSasu!!!! :D
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 07:39 am (UTC)
There's nothing wrong with being sadistic ... at least, that's what I keep telling myself xD


J
darkskysong: SasuNaruSasuflighty_designs on January 12th, 2007 07:21 am (UTC)
This is one of the 1st Naruto x Sasuke fics which I've read that does not let Sasuke off with a light punishment and I really, really like it. XD Today I decided to be evil to Sasuke.
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 07:37 am (UTC)
Hehe, you mean the "oh, Sauske's back, let ANBU follow him for a week and then he's a free man" kind of plots? Then one of those ANBU is Naruto, who spends a week fighting with Sasuke before they either have wild monkey sex, or one of them starts taking estrogen pills and becomes all weepy and lovey-dovey and then they have wild monk-, er, make sweet love? xD Sorry, I can't imagine Kishimoto letting him off easy in the end. The series is written for boys, and we certainly like our violence.

Maybe it was seeing too manu SasuNaru while trolling for NaruSasu, but I woke up today wanting to be evil to Sasuke, too.


J
darkskysong: SasuNaruSasuflighty_designs on January 12th, 2007 07:48 am (UTC)
Yep those plots. I've read too many mush ooc SasuNaruSasu.

I don't think Kishimoto would do that either, Sasuke dying seems to be the suitable thing.

Yay more evilness ^^. Oh a NaruSasu fic go me into the pairing, but yeah trolling for NaruSasu becomes hazardous when writers don't know their pairing.
kujo_hikaru: Ouran Twinskujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 08:15 am (UTC)
Even glancing at my bookmarks, 2/3rds of the NaruSasu stories were mislabeled (actually SasuNaru, but people are stupid and don't properly label).

Thoughts of Sasuke dying make me cry (on the inside, it's not very manly to cry). I came to the series because Kakashi is the hottest anime character I've ever seen (and we don't even see his whole face, so I guess it's the mystery), but Sasuke is the one I love. Though, the series does seem to beat the idea of dreams coming true if you try hard enough into our heads (i.e., Rock Lee's taijutsu, Neji's whole fate hangup, and Naruto's total incompitence turned super skills).

Still, I haven't see one episode or read one Manga chapter that makes me think Sasuke would ever be the dominant member of that relationship. That is, if Kishimoto, like 'had a mild stroke'/'was paid millions of dollars by fans'/'woke up with a mild case of gay' and actually put it into the series.

Gah, it's 2am here. I need to go to bed and stop thinking about Naruto smut.


J
 || -j.: sasunaru_coloredxakuryoux on January 12th, 2007 10:15 am (UTC)
oooh~
I'll be really looking forward to this!!! So different from alot of the fics out there... Rape the bastard!~
XD *evil*
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 03:41 pm (UTC)
Hehe, *evil*. Thanks for reading!


J
Mikra: naruxsasumikra on January 12th, 2007 02:07 pm (UTC)
Loved this. At last Sasuke is getting what he deserves. Not that I don't like him but this outcome feels more realistic than the 'week-under-surveillence'-fics. Well, at the moment at least. I'm feeling evil.
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 03:42 pm (UTC)
It's okay to feel evil. It's when you start getting the urge to wear a black spandex costume and hooded cape to skulk about town that you need to worry. Thanks for reading!


J
kawaiikitsune13 on January 12th, 2007 05:31 pm (UTC)
Definately continue, I can't wait to read more of this! ^.^ Rape the bastard Sasuke, he shouldn't have left the village in the first place. :-P

~Kristen
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 08:35 pm (UTC)
Thank you!


J
des_butterfly: back to backdes_butterfly on January 12th, 2007 05:44 pm (UTC)
I can see where this might be a compelling story line, and your writing technique is good, no problems there. However, if you do get a beta, I think characterization might be a problem if you want to continue this in the same plot as you have currently set up.

You would probably have to either explain why Naruto's personality has changed so much that he would want to 1) execute Sasuke or 2) torture Sasuke instead of saving him and caring for him like we currently see in the manga. Because up until this point, there is no evidence that Sasuke has done something that Naruto would consider worthy of this kind of punishment, nor is there evidence that Naruto would be the kind of person to inflict such a punishment on Sasuke.

And if Orochimaru is dead there really is no threat from Sasuke against Konoha that would require something such as execution or torture to the point of insanity.

And I doubt that Sakura would stand idly by and allow this to occur either, Hokage's orders or not.

The characterization is what worries me the most here, but if you were willing I could help you brainstorm on ways to fix that. Other than that, you show all signs of being a good writer with a nice flow and style.

And to the people commenting above me - I sincerely hope some of you are being sarcastic and don't actually believe that rape is an appropriate punishment for leaving the village.
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 08:34 pm (UTC)
Hehe, don't worry about the reason for the personality change, it's good *evil cackle*. It doesn't come up until the 3rd part, though. And Sakura knows why and probably agrees, deep down. I'll give you a hint: more character death.

But that's the problem with it being in three parts. I split it because of the length, but also because I'm an evil tease. Plus, it's long enough to really need a Beta to make sure my obsessive compulsive rewrites didn't break the consistency (in "Helping Hand", I had Sasuke undress three times by mistake).

As for rape, it's terrible and should never be condoned. Sasuke is given a choice in his punishment, but it's not much of a choice. Still, it's a choice.

Thank you for the compliment and the suggestions!


J
des_butterfly: Sasukedes_butterfly on January 12th, 2007 08:45 pm (UTC)
Well, really the only person I could see Naruto executing Sasuke for would be the death of Sakura. Even then, it would be a decision made because there was no other choice, and it would be a decision that would destroy Naruto as well.

And vice versa, the only way I can see Sakura allowing the execution of Sasuke would be if he had killed Naruto.

And, like I said, if Orochimaru has not taken over Sasuke's body, or is in threat of doing so, there is not really a threat to Konoha from Sasuke that would require his death. If you can explain all this in the second and third parts, then that's great. I'm only saying, from what you have now I see a lot of characterization problems.
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 09:57 pm (UTC)
They share someone else. Actually, several someone elses(sic). I think there are more people that they would place over Sasuke, post-betrayal.

As for there not being a threat, you still execute traitors after they've been captured. Once the cat was out of the bag (and they could no longer compromise national security), we still executed the Rosenbergs.

Being in charge means making descisions despite your personal feelings. When Naruto gets the big hat, he's going to have to learn that.


J
des_butterflydes_butterfly on January 12th, 2007 10:09 pm (UTC)
Uh...no. No, I'm pretty sure there's no one else they would place over Sasuke: including Kakashi (who would die for any of them anyway) and Iruka.

As for there not being a threat, you still execute traitors after they've been captured. Once the cat was out of the bag (and they could no longer compromise national security), we still executed the Rosenbergs.

And that was wrong. And besides the point. Tsunade left Konoha and considered betraying the village in return for Orochimaru bringing her loved ones back to life. She became Hokage. Anko still wears Orochimaru's mark and is allowed to roam the village freely. Even if Konoha decided it was necessary to execute Sasuke for some odd reason, I can't see Naruto or Sakura agreeing to it.

Being in charge means making descisions despite your personal feelings. When Naruto gets the big hat, he's going to have to learn that.

Except that it's Naruto and the theme of the series isn't "Naruto gets taught the harsh ways of shinobi life" as much as it is "Naruto changing the olds ways into new because the old ways sucked ass". See: Haku and Zabuza and Naruto's response to that. See: Neji and Naruto's argument regarding destiny. See: Jiraiya's warning post Sasuke's leaving and Naruto's response to that. See: Naruto's explanation to Sasuke that he wouldn't be much of a Hokage if he couldn't even resuce a friend.

When Naruto gets the big hat, it'll be because he's following his personal feelings, not because he's disregarded them.
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 11:30 pm (UTC)
I'm not going to argue anymore, seeing as the only way to make my point is to give away the ending.


J
友達.: neji // james bond's mastershikon_jewel on January 12th, 2007 08:34 pm (UTC)
I like it a lot a looot! please keep writing :D

I love hokage!Naruto and oblivious!Sasuke ^_^
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 08:35 pm (UTC)
Thank you!


J
xunfathomablex on January 12th, 2007 09:23 pm (UTC)
The evilness. That makes me happy.

NaruSasu makes me happy too. Can't wait for more parts to come out. :3
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 09:33 pm (UTC)
NaruSasu is part 3, so if I ever finish rewriting part 2, I can get it beta'ed and posted. Glad I could make you happy!


J
storomoonstoromoon on January 12th, 2007 11:18 pm (UTC)
sweet i whant to see this to the end!i can.t wait!!^___^
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 12th, 2007 11:30 pm (UTC)
Thank you. I'm almost done, then it's off to princess_emmi for Beta.


J
sekiyoku on January 13th, 2007 01:23 am (UTC)
On the topic of OOCness... I think the most out of character one is Sasuke... I just didn't get the sense of the character even being Sasuke. It's just some random evil guy with evil motives and evil thoughts. I mean, Sasuke would never refer to Orochimaru as his master, nor would he go and seduce Kabuto when he could be training to kill Itachi (nor would he ever use the term 'cock slut' xD).
rainbowfragment: No_Yaoi_Definitionrainbowfragment on January 14th, 2007 06:17 am (UTC)
I must say... I am curious having read all these other comments you have been responding to stating that the OOCness will be explained later, and will be more understandable in the final chapter or part of this idea. I can't wait to see what you have intended, because even to go as far to believe it is merely a death of someone like Kakashi or Iruka as des_butterfly implied I don't think is correct. Meaning... I have to still agree with des_butterfly and sekiyoku that OOCness and characterization is an issue with Team 7 and a possible danger. BUT I also like this idea. It isn't an easy idea, and considering you were bold enough to stick out your neck on a whim I admire that. Something I often cannot do myself. I didn't have the courage to even ponder this idea same idea (coniencidentally in the past few days... was like de ja vu. lol) beyond a possibility. I would never attempt to write it considering the moment I thought it, I realized how DIFFICULT it would really be. More power to you for having the courage I didn't!! And that said, I feel I should give the chance (as I was trying to state above) to respect you managed something and thought this all through somewhat before you just slapped this up. Therefore, I will wait patiently to see what ensues. I am not going to try and read your mind, because I must admit when you said character death I was like des_butterfly but I have learned my lessons with trying to second guess writers intentions and actions (coughdamnKishimoto-sancough).

Good luck!

Sincerest,
Shinigami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)

P.S.
des_butterfly and sekiyoku I meant no disrespect in using your names as agreements, it is just that you managed to say everything I meant to mention here... and as we can see I ramble enough without having to restate all you said above. I also didn't mean any disrespect in how I seem to play "angel" off of your actions. I agree with your views, and typically I would have said the same things you did, but some bias and previous experiences have me doing things and reacting a little differently lately. I am sorry if either of you felt offended in any way. There is my disclaimer for the day... lol

Sincerest,
Shiningami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 14th, 2007 06:52 am (UTC)
If there's one thing that pisses me off more than anything else in a fanfic, it has to be OOC. If you're not going to use the characterization from the original source, why the hell even use a source in the first place. If you don't keep them in character it's not even a fanfic, it's just an original fiction that steals someone else's character names. The biggest one that pisses me off has to be "Naru-chan", Naruto's whiny little bitch self.

I guess the only thing that I would've hoped for is that people would've waited with the OOC comments until the entire story was posted. However, I do apologize for the delay. The original second part utilized existing characters for the gang bang, but it just didn't flow right. It seemed to me that I was more dropping the names of Naruto characters than really using them in the scene. Besides, the only person I think should be with Sasuke is Naruto! I think I just gave away more the story that I wanted to, but that's okay: both lemons will still make it all worthwhile.


J
rainbowfragment: Heat_uprainbowfragment on January 15th, 2007 12:11 am (UTC)
Gomen nasai. I see... then I guess this is all kinda quite stressful for you. That given... best of luck. Because I know what you mean, I have written a few things (like this kinda, on whim. lol) and have gotten a couple of OOC as comments. lol. I accept that. Because those were kinda similar to this thing... not entirely. But the same thing. Just a lemon that happened to run through out heads. And I understand entirely the "Naru-chan" as you dubbed it... or I guess others. I wouldn't know... because I happened to never read SasuNaru where it would appear.

Well... speaking for myself kinda... I didn't wait because sometimes there is the possiblity of fixing the story before it continues any further. And I assume whem people post it bit by bit that they would like the feedback as they go through... lol. When I first clicked on this and it said "gang bang" I was first of all shocked, and secondly curious WHO would gang bang SASUKE? lol. So when you mention that you originally wanted to include other characters in the manga/anime I was like, that would have been amazing to try and pull off. Indeed, Naruto owns Sasuke. ^___~ lol. I don't think you gave anything away here... but maybe I am not as smart with hints... lol. ^__^;

And I wouldn't worry too much if it doesn't turn out as well as you wanted. That happens sometimes. lol. You tried and then that is a notehr fic under your belt too! I find that gaining some experience and getting things down sometimes is the best start. And a lot of the time I will have to go back and redo the entire thing so I can make sure to be consistent. Either way, I will be entertained I am sure. [Although I am probably entertained by the mere idea... lol]

Sincerest,
Shinigami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)
rainbowfragment: Behold_Pornrainbowfragment on January 14th, 2007 06:19 am (UTC)
Oh. I almost forgot. If you really can't find anyone to beta your fic. I don't mind volunteering. lol. I am not that awesome, so I would leave me as a last resort! lol. ^___^; Maybe... I could convince Hee-chan to help if she isn't too busy and look over it.

Sincerely,
Shinigami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 14th, 2007 06:53 am (UTC)
I did find one, but it never hurts to have two. If I ever get around to the Bleach thick that I have waiting, I might just have you take a look.


J
rainbowfragmentrainbowfragment on January 15th, 2007 12:02 am (UTC)
Alright. Then continue away!!! lol. ^____^ Thanks for letting me know!

Sincerest,
Shinigami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 15th, 2007 01:40 am (UTC)
Oops, I meant fic, not thick. Still training the stupid voice-recognition program. But I will say, it's certainly easier than typing. And surprisingly, it are Eddie knew the name Kakashi! :-)


J
rainbowfragmentrainbowfragment on January 15th, 2007 07:18 am (UTC)
NANI?! Cool. Voice recognition program! Awesome. ^___^

"it are Eddie"? Oh... it already. lol. But still cool. Wow... and it did Kakashi?! AWESOME!! SUGOI!! I am sure that helps a lot on the not developing carpel tunnel. (Sometimes I fear for my future with as much as I love to write)

But I didn't pay the "typo" of sorts any mind. Though I found it odd... lol. I wasn't sure. Didn't seem like a English as a second language mistake... but also didn't seem quite a typo. lol. I envy you!

But wouldn't it be embarassing to do the lemons etc? Or do you live alone? lol.

Shinigami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 15th, 2007 03:53 pm (UTC)
Damnit, damnit, damnit. Yes, that was supposed to be "it already". My boss is lazy and hates to type, so I picked up Dragon to test and see how it works for him. So far, it's the stupid little phonetic things it misses. When you dictate a whole sentence at a time, it tends to pick things up from context, but when you try to write things out in short bursts of words it'll make mistakes like that. So, I guess I can use it to write stories, but quick comment replies are not its forte.

As for the lemon, I was thinking of grabbing my laptop and freaking people out at Starbucks. xD Oh I'm evil.


J
rainbowfragmentrainbowfragment on January 15th, 2007 04:19 pm (UTC)
lmao. That is brilliant!!!! love it!!! Oh... that I would pay to be there for... someone doing a NARUTO lemon in the middle of Starbucks. You should try and make sure there are fans around who will hear you... preferably the homophobic guy kinds. ^__^ Oh the entertainment that could bring me. Except I would be in Barnes and Noble doing it in the manga section... maybe later I would feel guilty for allowing some twelve year-old little boy to hear. But at the moment I would get such a kick. That or randomly start talking when my friends are around and doing the lemon.

Shinigami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)
scieszka_chanscieszka_chan on January 14th, 2007 11:52 am (UTC)
Hey, this is great! I'm so in love with Uke!Sasu, I can't wait for the next chapters X3 It's nicely written, too. Keep on writing and have my love. ^^
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 15th, 2007 01:41 am (UTC)
Love is always accepted! Thanks for the comment!


J
countess_kcountess_k on January 22nd, 2007 09:31 am (UTC)
Like someone else said befpore, I like it that for once Sasuke isn't let off easy. Almost all "Sasuke is back " stories are about how the current hokage rubs his/her forehead in frustration and ends the "meeting" with: "All right, you're free. Just don't cause any trouble." Then the story melts down into a puddle of Naruto and Sasuke living and bickering like a married couple. I like your idea much better, it's new and refreshing. I also LOVE a strict Naruto who's not a bitch to Sakura and who even Ibiki is afraid of. Very unique.

Now I would be really sad if you didn't post the rest soon, and I really pray this be a long story so that I would enjoy and drool over it for a decent time. Would pretty please speed up your writing? ;)
kujo_hikarukujo_hikaru on January 25th, 2007 05:56 am (UTC)
Sweet holy fuck, it's been like two weeks. I'm sorry, I completely lost track of time. Stupid work with stupid customers waiting until the stupid new year to order stupid software. I haven't even slept at home the last week, usually I've just crashed on the couch in my office.

Tomorrow night I promise to finish looking it all over (the last two are written), and send them to my beta. Once she's done, I'll post. That is, if she even remembers me ... xD


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candyisdandy123 on January 30th, 2007 04:30 am (UTC)
i cant wait for the next chapts im intersted . hurry and write them ^^